Rate my poem for me please?

I think you're a monk yourself, 15,000 years old. Great poem!! If I were your teacher, I'd give you an A. There are really no rules in saying the unsayable. But there are lots of tools that you can use if you want to - like rhymes, meters, metaphors, and even grammar and puntuation. You're are free to fly as you wish so long as you can effectively touch the hearts of your fans and readers.